Some people think that parents should teach children. how to be good members of society Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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mother and father should teach
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,how to be good members of society. Other people think that
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school
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life.
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, many people think that
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member
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the world.
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their
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most
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are trying to
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their
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are motivating their
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always .Because They want to create good
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for the world.
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, other people think that
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School
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is the best place to learn about society .
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,all the
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from grade 1 to grade 13.
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seven or eight hours in
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whereas
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kids
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can learn many
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teachers
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.who are trying to
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good activities for
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valuable
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can learn many subjects
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teachers are giving some
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patrical
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are making good
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person
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world. They
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encourage
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and second paragraph about both views.
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I believe that ,
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and teachers both are trying to make good members for their
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teacher
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. After that,
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are going to
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. Teachers are protecting their
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and they are giving a lot of knowledge
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their students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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