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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays a lot of
companies
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 sponsor sports
teams
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 as a means to advertise themselves, They sometimes put their logo on the player's shirts,
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 they can
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 have the players appear in their TV ads or have the players use their products Some people may think it a disadvantage to let greedy
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 have some sort of control over the team,
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they might say that it takes from the sport, Now that every time they look at their favourite team playing they might see an ad that takes their mind off the sport,
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 will have a negative view of the team, The
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 and the player.
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companies
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 may have beliefs that don't go wall with the fans
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it via religion or supporting questionable causes. Others think it a positive thing now that even small
teams
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 in small lesser know countries can be helped by the money associations are willing to pay to have their logo on players' t-shirts, That money could help them pay for better equipment
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 better training and even better results.
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 others may enjoy the ads and see it as a chance to buy something that they have on their mind.
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 both sides have a point to make I think it‘s an
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 good thing that small
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 could have a chance against big names in their sport now that they can buy better training equipment
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 in a sense
companies
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 may help struggling
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 make their dreams come true.
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