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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situtation outweigh the diadvantages. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from tour own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, number of
population
 of young adults is more compared to older people. As every coin
have
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has
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 two sides in
same
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the same
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 way
this
also
have
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 two sides positive
as well as
 negative.
Firstly
, The main
advanatge
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advantage
 As
young
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the young
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people
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people's
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population
will
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increases
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increase
 there will be
alots
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a lot
 of opportunities available.
Due to
 more
population
 of young will be there
then
increase
employment
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in employment
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as well as
 knowledge. As
young
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the young
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population
will grow
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grows
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then
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apply
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there will be a lot
increase
 in technology
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apply
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also
.
For example
, as
young
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the young
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population
will be
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is
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more
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older
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 they will progress more and more in technology which
make
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makes
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 things
more easy
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easier
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 and
fast
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faster
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.
Hence
,
increase
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the increase
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 in
young
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the young
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population
have
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has
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 many advantages. Countries should support even
idea
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ideas
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 for
young
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the young
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population
. From my own
expercience
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experience
, the government should give
important
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importance
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 to both
old
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the old
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population
 and
young
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the young
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popluation
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population
.
Secondly
, the main disadvantage is On the side of disadvanatge, as
number
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the number
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 of young
population
 is more compared to
older
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the older
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popluation
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population
populations
due to
this
older
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the older
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popluation
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population
 are facing problem in
empolyment
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employment
.
Older
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The older
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population
 have more knowledge and
expercience
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experience
compare
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compared
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 to
young
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the young
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. The value of
young
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the young
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population
 is more
compare
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compared
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 to
old
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the old
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thus
 there are facing a problem.
For example
,
young
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the young
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population
 are getting more job
opporunities
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opportunities
compare
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compared
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 to
older
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the older
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 one.
Thirdly
,
Nation
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the Nation
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 should support the idea of
older
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an older
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population
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apply
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also
. From my own knowledge about play an equal role in the country development.
To conclude
, there are equal advantages
as well as
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
. So countries should treat both
young
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the young
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population
as well as
 older
population
 equally. Both
generation
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generations
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population is
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are
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 important older
population
as well as
young
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the young
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population
.
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