In a number of countries, some people thinks it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As now public
tranport
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transport
have been increased. The number of cars
are
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increased on roads. Spending large sums of
money
on constructing new railway
line
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for very fast trains between cities is
also
good. But spending more
money
in
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improving existing public
transport
is more better idea. In my own opinion, more
money
should
be spend
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on improving existing public
transport
. My viewpoint is described in the below
information
. Spending large sums on constructing new
railways
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lines
have
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many
advanatges
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advantages
like as new
railways
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lines
will be
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constructed many people will get employment.
However
, as new railway
lines
will be constructed the
government
have to give more and more knowledge to the community.
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, if the
government
will build
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new
lines
then
the
government
have
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to
also
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provide
information
to
public
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. From my own knowledge
government
have
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to
also
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teach
public
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about more
facilities
about
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using new
facilities
. Spending more
money
on improving existing public
transport
have more advantage because the main reason for
this
is that the
government
will be free from providing
information
to the public about new
facilities
.
For example
, spending more on existing
facilities
will benefit more to the
governement
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government
as well as
communities.
however
, the
government
should focus more on existing public
transport
.
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, improving existing public
transport
have
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advanategs
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advantages
. From my own experience, the
government
will get more benefits in improving existing public
transport
.
To conclude
, in my viewpoint
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in my opinion, the nation should spend more on improving existing public
transport
because it
have
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more advantages
compare
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to spending
large
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amount on constructing
new
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railway line in the country.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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