The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the percentage of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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possessing a variety of qualifications after completing school in Australia in the year 1999.
Overall
, the highest percentage of
male
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males
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possessed
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a
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Vocational Diploma
while
the lowest percentage of
female
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females
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category was
also
from the same qualification.
To begin
with, 70% of men completed Postgraduation which is more than twice the
percent
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percentage
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of women who had Postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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.
Similarly
,
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a Masters
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Masters
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Masters's
Master's
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degree was
also
more prominent in boys than girls. Moving
further
,
Vocational
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the Vocational
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diploma course showed a significant difference of almost 80 per cent between both genders. It is evident that girls
perferred
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preferred
the Undergraduate program more than boys in the year specified with
the
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a
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difference margin of 35%. A similar trend was seen in the Bachelor program as well but the difference
beween
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between
the genders was almost 5 per cent. To add on, 50% of boys and 45% of girls
possed
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possessed
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a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree in 1999.
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