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Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. Do [you think] the advantage outweight the disadvantage.

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Although
 paid
work
 is thought by some to be a useful experience for
children
, other people consider that it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I think that paid
work
 can bring about more problems for
children
 compared to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of
children
 working for
money
.
Firstly
,
children
 can develop an understanding of the value of
money
.
This
 teaches them that
money
 does not grow on trees and helps them appreciate the hard
work
 needed to earn it.
Secondly
, they take the first step in learning how to manage
money
. Many older
children
,
for instance
, have a part-time job in order to save for something they would
otherwise
 be unable to afford. Understanding
money
 management,
furthermore
, is useful when, as adults, they will need to balance their finances.
Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe
children
 could face serious drawbacks from paid
work
. One potentially dangerous problem is that it exposes them to exploitation through slave labour. In some countries that do not enforce child employment laws, they may end up working under extreme conditions or even in life-threatening situations for negligible wages. Starting life in
this
 way makes it almost impossible for them to escape poverty as an adult. Another obvious issue is that working may affect a child’s ability to focus on their school
work
.
This
 is a concern as only with a strong academic performance can a child hope to advance as an adult. In conclusion, being exploited or struggling with academic grades far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from
children
 being involved in
work
 experience.
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