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The table below displays the projected costings over the next five years in US dollars for three environmental projects aimed at sustainable forestry.

The table below displays the projected costings over the next five years in US dollars for three environmental projects aimed at sustainable forestry.
The table below displays the projected costings over the next five
years
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 in US
dollars
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 for three environmental projects aimed at sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected allocation of expenditure breakdown for the
first
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 year as the projects are set up.
Overall
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 in the
table
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 we can
can
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apply
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see that costs will
have fluctuated
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fluctuate
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by
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in
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 the next five
years
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. In West Africa and Central
America
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 costings will have dropped dramatically
at
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in
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 the
first
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 4
years
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 .
Whereas
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 in
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia
costing
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the cost
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 will have fallen
at
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in
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 the
only
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first
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 two
years
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 . Projected expenditure in year 1 vast majority is the salaries and set-up costs . West
Africa
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Africa's
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 expenditure is going to decrease in the next four
years
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 and rise
1
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by 1
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million
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dollars
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at
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in
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 the fifth year. Central America
also
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 going to have
boom
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a boom
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 , but after two
years
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 it will stay constant , only 5
million
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dollars
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.
South -east
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Southeast
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 Asia going to
down
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 to 10
million
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dollars
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 at
the
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first
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 , but after it will have had a rocket , forty and fifty
million
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dollars
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. Set-up costs will have amounted
30
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 per cent and salaries fifty per cent. The remaining 20% will be for training and
for
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office expenses.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, dollars, first, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable forestry
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Deforestation
  • Surveillance
  • Illegal logging
  • Eco-friendly technology
  • Environmental impact
  • Research and development
  • Selective logging
  • Agroforestry
  • Biodiversity
  • Grants
  • Subsidies
  • Reforestation
  • Nurseries
  • Skilled workers
  • Forest management
  • Projected costings
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