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The table shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows expected expenditure for the year.

The table shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows expected expenditure for the year.
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The table shows the projected costings over the next five years in American
dollars
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 for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows
expected
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the expected
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 expenditure for the
year
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. The table shows 3 countries:
West
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Africa
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 , Central
America
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,
South-East
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and South-East
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Asia
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, which were previously mentioned . For the
first
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year
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west
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West
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Africa
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 would spend 10.5
million
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dollars
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.Central
America
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 20
million
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 and South East
Asia
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 ,the highest,would
30
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million
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 American
dollars
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.
Pie
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The pie
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 chart shows only
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first
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the first
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years
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year's
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 expenses prediction.About half of the budget would
take
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be
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 salaries. Set up costs include 30 per cent and equally
splitted
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split
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 proportion is training and office expenses. Second
year
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,
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west
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West
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Africa
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7.5
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had 7.5
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million
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,Central
America
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 a little more than
Africa
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 for 5.5 per cent.
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 again
the
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had the
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 highest 20
million
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dollars
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 but less than in
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first
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year
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. The 3
year
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 spends
overall
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 47.5
million
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dollars
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,vast majority takes
Asia
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 with 40
percentage
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per cent
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. Penultimate
year
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 pay out 2.5
million
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 for
West
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Africa
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,5
million
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 for Central
America
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 and rest 50
millions
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million
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 for South East
Asia
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. In the
last
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year
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West
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Africa
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 would spend 3.5, Central
America
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 5
million
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dollars
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.
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 once more on top. 50
million
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 American
dollars
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 for the
year
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.
Overall
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,
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first
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the first
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year
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year's
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 expenditure was the most costly,60.5
million
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dollars
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 ,less expense
is
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in
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second
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the second
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year
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 only with 39.5
million
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dollars
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, year, west, africa, america, asia, first, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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