The table shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows expected expenditure for the year.
The table shows the projected costings over the next five years in American
dollars
for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows expected
expenditure for the Add an article
the expected
year
.
The table shows 3 countries: West
Africa
, Central America
,South-East
Correct word choice
and South-East
Asia
, which were previously mentioned .
For the first
year
west
Capitalize word
West
Africa
would spend 10.5 million
dollars
.Central America
20 million
and South East Asia
,the highest,would 30
Add a missing verb
be 30
million
American dollars
. Pie
chart shows only Add an article
The pie
A pie
first
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the first
years
expenses prediction.About half of the budget would Change noun form
year's
take
salaries. Set up costs include 30 per cent and equally Verb problem
be
splitted
proportion is training and office expenses. Second Correct your spelling
split
year
,west
Capitalize word
West
Africa
7.5
Add a missing verb
had 7.5
million
,Central America
a little more than Africa
for 5.5 per cent. South east
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Southeast
Asia
again the
highest 20 Add a missing verb
had the
million
dollars
but less than in first
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the first
year
. The 3 year
spends overall
47.5 million
dollars
,vast majority takes Asia
with 40 percentage
. Penultimate Replace the word
per cent
year
pay out 2.5 million
for West
Africa
,5 million
for Central America
and rest 50 millions
for South East Change to singular
million
Asia
. In the last
year
West
Africa
would spend 3.5, Central America
5 million
dollars
. South east
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Southeast
Asia
once more on top. 50 million
American dollars
for the year
.
Overall
,first
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the first
year
expenditure was the most costly,60.5 Change noun form
year's
million
dollars
,less expense is
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in
second
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the second
year
only with 39.5 million
dollars
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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