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The table provides data about reasons for using the car in the city, with the diagram which gives information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The table provides data about reasons for using the car in the city, with the diagram which gives information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
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The table provides data about reasons for using the
car
 in the city, with the diagram which gives information on transport and
car
 use in Edmonton. As can be indicated from the table,that people who
uses
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use
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 the
car
 in the city have five different aims.
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,the majority(55%) who
drives
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drive
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car
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the car
a car
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 to commute to work,but much
more
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apply
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lower per
cent
 of residents(15%)
principaly
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principally
 use it for shopping.
Morever
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Moreover
,the same small proportion(15%) attributes to
that people
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that person
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 who applies
car
 for Leisure activities.
By contrast
,
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a significantly
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significantly
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 per
cent
 of the table(45%)
contain
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contains
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 from that
indvidualities
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individualities
 who involves
car
 for doing business and
practicly
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practically
 equal proportions with lack of Five per
cent
,consist of those who
taking
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took
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 children to school. It is clear from the diagram that
Car
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the Car
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 is rated as the most spread way of movement
amoung
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among
 the
mojority
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majority
 of all transports,with a massive 45 per
cent
.
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