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Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays a majority of people think that
children
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 should start school as soon as possible
however
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 other groups argue about it and believe that it is better to start studying and learning at
seven
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. In my
opinion
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 it is better for
children
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 to start it at the right
time
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 like six or
seven
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 and I shall outline
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 point of view in the rest of the passage.
Firstly
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, some
parents
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 have
this
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 idea that
kids
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 should initiate studying at school as soon as possible.
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, it can be seen in any situation that tough
parents
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 could put pressure on
kids
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 to hackle a problem in their childish and it can be harmful for
kids
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.
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, I believe that
children
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 should have enough
time
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 to spend not only playing but
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 feeling like a
child
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, there is a
time
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 gap between childhood and teenage
time
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 so it's important for
parents
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 to make logical differences between them.
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, researchers have
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shown that adults who have had disciplinarian
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parents
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time
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 for themselves as a
child
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 so they want to act
as
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 a kid when they get older.
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, some
parents
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 want their
kids
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 to be either special or astonished but it can cause different disorders in
children
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 so
parents
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 should let
kids
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 grow up in the correct way and act like their own age.
On the other hand
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, we have a majority of people who think that
children
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 should have their special
time
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 as a
child
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 so they should start school at
seven
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.
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 kind of
parents
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 let their
kids
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 grow up in
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 right situation so they can flourish their talents as a
child
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 and do whatever other
kids
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 do and learn how to make different relationships with several people.
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 between 3 to 7 is an essential
time
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 for
children
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 to figure out their position in the environment and their family so they have enough
time
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 to find out about different
things
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 as a kid.
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, there is an important
time
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 for
children
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 to understand different types of
things
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 like colours and learn to build a friendship with their friends. so
parents
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 should let
children
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 find out many
things
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 by themselves to find out their situation in the world and
then
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 think about the bigger
things
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 like studying.
To conclude
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, I agree with
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 idea that
children
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 should start their study
time
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 at the right
time
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 like
seven
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 in
this
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 place
children
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 could have enough
time
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 to find out their proper place in the world so
parents
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 should learn how to behave in the correct way with their
kids
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moreover
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,
parents
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 can help their
children
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 in their improvement.
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