Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters( such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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society
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. In my own opinion,
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should make
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that affect them. Nowadays,
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parents allow
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children
to make their own choices in everyday matters like what they want to eat, what they want to
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wear
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, what they want to watch and much more.
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, if a
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children
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then
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do
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in which they are interested
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they will get
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better expectations.
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, kids should
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to choose what they like.
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should be free to choose
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. As each
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small
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also
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affect a lot
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, if a small child
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something very great
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other
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also
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. So, every person should think before doing something. A Person should do
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some things
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for
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also
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should support
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who
have
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achive
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achieved
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,
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won
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which
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impact
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on other
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should help
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children
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who
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in
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study
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and
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have financial
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problems
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. Rich
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should support poor
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for the development of the nation
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To conclude
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, in my own opinion,
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children
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should be free
in choosing
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there
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their
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own
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for themself.
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,
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should think before doing
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which can affect
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society
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. Each
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every
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things
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to
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of
an individuals
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individuals
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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