Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters( such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
As each and everything of
individuals
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individual
affect
a Change the verb form
affects
society
. In my own opinion, children
should make decision
that affect them.
Nowadays, Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
if
parents allow Correct word choice
apply
chidren
to make their own choices in everyday matters like what they want to eat, what they want to Correct your spelling
children
were
, what they want to watch and much more. Correct your spelling
wear
For example
, if a parsent
will force Correct your spelling
parents
there
Replace the word
their
children
then
it will become difficult for children
to focus on that things
. Thus
, if children
will
do Verb problem
apply
that
Correct determiner usage
the
things
in which they are interested then
they will get more
better expectations. Change the word
apply
Hence
, kids should be allow
to choose what they like. Change the verb form
be allowed
Children
should be free to choose things
.
As each individuals
small Fix the agreement mistake
individual
things
also
affect a lot to
Change preposition
of
society
. For instance
, if a small child will do
something very great Wrong verb form
does
then
it will affect on
other Change preposition
apply
people
also
. So, every person should think before doing something. A Person should do somethings
for Correct your spelling
some things
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
also
. Society
should support person
who Fix the agreement mistake
people
have
Change the verb form
has
achive
something for Correct your spelling
achieved
society
. For example
, as
India Correct word choice
apply
have
won Correct subject-verb agreement
has
prize
which Add an article
a prize
the prize
have
Change the verb form
has
impact
on other Add an article
an impact
people
also
. Society
should help whose
Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
who good
Add a missing verb
are good
in
Change preposition
at
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies
and
have financial Correct word choice
but
problem
. Rich Fix the agreement mistake
problems
people
should support poor people
for the development of the nation as well as
society
.
To conclude
, in my own opinion, a
Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
children
should be free in choosing
Change preposition
to choose
there
own Correct your spelling
their
things
for themself. However
, a
Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
children
should think before doing there
Replace the word
their
things
which can affect a
Correct article usage
apply
society
. Each an
every Correct your spelling
and
things
Change to a singular noun
thing
affect
to Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
society
of an individuals
.Correct the article-noun agreement
individuals
an individual
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