Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters( such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As each and everything of
individuals
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affect
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a
society
. In my own opinion,
children
should make
decision
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decisions
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that affect them. Nowadays,
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parents allow
chidren
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children
to make their own choices in everyday matters like what they want to eat, what they want to
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wear
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, what they want to watch and much more.
For example
, if a
parsent
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parents
will force
there
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children
then
it will become difficult for
children
to focus on that
things
.
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, if
children
will
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do
that
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things
in which they are interested
then
they will get
more
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better expectations.
Hence
, kids should
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to choose what they like.
Children
should be free to choose
things
. As each
individuals
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small
things
also
affect a lot
to
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of
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society
.
For instance
, if a small child
will do
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something very great
then
it will affect
on
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other
people
also
. So, every person should think before doing something. A Person should do
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some things
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for
the
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society
also
.
Society
should support
person
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people
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who
have
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achive
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achieved
something for
society
.
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,
as
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India
have
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has
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won
prize
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a prize
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which
have
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impact
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an impact
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on other
people
also
.
Society
should help
whose
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children
who
good
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are good
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in
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at
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study
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studies
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and
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but
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have financial
problem
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problems
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. Rich
people
should support poor
people
for the development of the nation
as well as
society
.
To conclude
, in my own opinion,
a
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children
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children
should be free
in choosing
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there
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their
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own
things
for themself.
However
,
a
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children
a child
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children
should think before doing
there
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their
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things
which can affect
a
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apply
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society
. Each
an
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and
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every
things
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thing
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affect
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affects
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to
society
of
an individuals
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individuals
an individual
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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