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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, there has been more and more emphasis on
health
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. Some argue that there is too much sugar in the product
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 as food and drinks available in the market which leads to
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 problems. The Government should charge an additional fee for sugary
products
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 that contain a high level of sugar. I personally agree with
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 approach and I will list out some the of benefits below.
Firstly
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, charging higher prices will definitely reduce
people
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's consumption of sugary
products
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. Sometimes,
people
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 are unaware of the number of carbohydrates contained in the sugary
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 as drinks they purchase, as the manufacturer intends to find ways to emphasise their
products
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 as more healthy even though they are not.
For instance
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, some
juice
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 shops label themselves healthier as the freshness of the
juice
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.
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, they even do not inform their customers about the amount of sugar contained in one
regular size
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juice
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, which can be extremely high for some items
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 as grape
juice
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.
Secondly
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, making these unhealthy
products
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 more expensive will help consumers make better choices when purchasing the product.
Furthermore
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, they are simply bad for
health
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 and lead to many problems
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 as obesity, diabetes, heart problems and tooth decay. With more and more
people
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 switching to healthier
products
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, the nation will definitely benefit from saving on healthcare in the long run. In conclusion, sugary
products
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 are harmful to
people
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's well-being and higher charges should be taken in order to control the carbohydrate intake and eventually improve the
health
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 of the population.
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