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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Nowadays, are is
an
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 trend in some countries for renting a
house
. As every coin have two sides in the same ways
this
have
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 two
effect
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 positive
as well as
 negative. I think owning a
house
 rather than renting one is very
imporatant
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important
 for
people
. I think
this
have
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 a positive situation.
Firstly
, On the positive side of renting a
house
, is a
people
 can go where they like. Renting a
house
have
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 so many benefits. Every
people
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person
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 can
rent
 a
house
. In many
case
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a
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people
 can only
rent
apartment
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apartments
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.
For example
,
a
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people
 who are doing work like vlogging
they
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have to go from one place to another place for
them
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renting a
house
 is
very
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a very
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 useful
things
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.
Hence
,
a
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government should support
people
 in
rent
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renting
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 a
house
. The public like a student who are living in
the
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another nation
for
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 study
prepose
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for
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them
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rent
 is
better
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options
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. The main
case
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cause
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 for
this
 is that
because
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people
 want to go to different places.
Secondly
,
On
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the negative side of renting a
house
 is that
people
 feel unsafe. But,
People
 have the feeling that they are living in rented apartments.
For example
, if a person
want
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wants
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 to live in a one place
who
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and
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have
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has
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 even
working
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 there for years
for
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them
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owning a
house
 is better.
Thirdly
,
However
,
a
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 government should even support those
people
 who want to buy a
house
.
To conclude
,
as
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renting
house
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a house
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have
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 more positive sides. So, I think renting a Positive situation
as well as
 renting
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house
 is
better
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a better
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 option.
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