Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this?

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The number of
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directly enrolling in university after completing high
school
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has been on a significant rise.
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poses numerous benefits including no gap in an
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, resulting in an increasing focus during graduate
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but there are
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numerous drawbacks to consider here.
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, one benefit of the rising trend in direct enrollment after high
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graduation, leads to
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absence
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the absence
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of
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in
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education
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.
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in turn results in a good understanding of the subjects
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its
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application, ultimately, leading to a better grip on the course.
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, after graduating directly from
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the university
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, they can earn a good package,
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of doing
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for
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salary between schools owing to
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absence
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of specialization.
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, it can offer good concentration to the
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. Elon Musk,
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, received financial help from his parents during
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, which took away the burden of studying and paying for tuition making him a physics
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and paving
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the way
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for founding numerous companies.
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, one major problem schoolgoers face is the
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of work experience right out of
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high
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.
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can be a major drawback as
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,
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, will only receive theoretical knowledge and will find it hard to connect the dots between
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jobs and
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subjects,
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proving it to be detrimental in the long run.
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, after getting
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financial support from parents for advanced
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,
students
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don’t know the true value of money.
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,
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students
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don’t focus well enough on their studies and can become victims of bad habits
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as smoking, and drugs at an early age, which in turn affects their grades.
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,
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high
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graduates need to deal with paltry pay
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absence
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of specialization or concentrated skillsets. In conclusion,
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there are numerous benefits of doing higher
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straight out of
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high
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,
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, the shortcomings of
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the void
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of formal experience and concentrated skillsets
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association
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bad habits are hard to dismiss.
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