The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and

2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
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The given bar chart illustrates amounts of world wild
sales
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of the top five phone manufacturers which are
Samsung
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,
Apple
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,
Nokia
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, LG, and ZTE in millions in three time periods between 2009 and 2013. As an overview, it can be seen that
Nokia
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sold the most mobile phones in both 2009 and 2011.
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, the highest number of global
sales
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in 2013 belongs to
Samsung
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.
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, both
Samsung
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and
Apple
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experienced significant increases during the given periods. As
it
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apply
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can be observed,
Nokia
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had the highest amount of
sales
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with approximately 450
million
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in revenue from mobile phones in 2009. Meanwhile, in 2011
Nokia
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experienced a negligible fall losing roughly 10
million
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of its income from selling
this
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product,
Samsung
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's figure shows a remarkable increase in worldwide sell achieving close to 320
million
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in revenue.
Also
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,
this
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growth in
Samsung
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’s global sale remains and make it the manufacturer with the highest amount of sale with nearly 450
million
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in 2013.
In contrast
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,
Nokia
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’s revenue strikingly decreased to approximately 250
million
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and took second place in that year.
On the other hand
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, LG achieved third place in
sales
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of a given product with 110
million
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income in global
sales
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in 2009.
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, The two other manufacturers,
Apple
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and ZTE, gained fourth and five place in world wild
sales
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during that year with nearly 20 and 50
million
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in remuneration respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Apple
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's
sales
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figure shows a remarkable rise in the amount of
sales
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and
this
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growth resulted in achieving 125
million
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units sold in 2013.
Conversely
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, LG's number of units sold slowly fell until 2013 and reached roughly 80
million
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. The other manufacturer, ZTEs figure doesn’t show any significant change and experienced negligible increase which is insignificant, and a gain of nearly 60
million
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units sold worldwide
at the end
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of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, samsung, apple, nokia, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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