The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.
The pie charts provide information about the change in the proportion of
energy
released from a variety of sources in a country from 1985 to 2003.
Overall
, comparing both
the
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years, the maximum increase in the
energy
ejected was evident from coal where the increase was by 14%.
To begin
with,in 1985,the predominant amount of the
energy
was from oil
that
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makes
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up 52%, followed by nuclear plants and natural gas which produced 22% and 13% respectively.
Energy
from coal plants was twice the
energy
emitted from Hydro sources. The least amount of
energy
was produced by other renewable sources accounting for 1% of
overall
energy
consumption. It is evident that in 2005 as well, oil was the major source of
energy
as it was in the previous year . In 2005,
energy
from natural gas and coal was almost the same with only one percentage difference between them. Nuclear power plants
released
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twice the
energy
emitted by both hydro and other renewable resources.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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