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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.
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The pie charts provide information about the change in the proportion of
energy
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 released from a variety of sources in a country from 1985 to 2003.
Overall
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, comparing both
the
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apply
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years, the maximum increase in the
energy
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 ejected was evident from coal where the increase was by 14%.
To begin
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 with,in 1985,the predominant amount of the
energy
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 was from oil
that
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which
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makes
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made
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 up 52%, followed by nuclear plants and natural gas which produced 22% and 13% respectively.
Energy
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 from coal plants was twice the
energy
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 emitted from Hydro sources. The least amount of
energy
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 was produced by other renewable sources accounting for 1% of
overall
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energy
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 consumption. It is evident that in 2005 as well, oil was the major source of
energy
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 as it was in the previous year . In 2005,
energy
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 from natural gas and coal was almost the same with only one percentage difference between them. Nuclear power plants
released
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release
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 twice the
energy
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 emitted by both hydro and other renewable resources.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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