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Some believe that it is beneficial to show foreign films while others feel this can have a negative impact on local culture. give both views and give your own opinion.

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 .Some
indivisuals
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individuals
 think that presenting foreign films
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 more benefits,
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 opponents believe that it may diminish the
value
 of local tradition.
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the pros and cons of
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 and
also
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my opinion
also
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 regarding
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Firstly
, streaming foreign
movies
 helps individuals to study and examine
others
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culture
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cultures
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 and values.
Secondly
, it helps
public
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the public
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 to boost their skill. To be more precise, some foreign
movies
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movies'
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contents
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are
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 motivating and
have
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 moral
value
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it
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.
For instance
,
when
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when individuals watch English
movies
, it enables
to
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them to
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 increase
the
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English speaking
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 capability.
However
, there
some
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 disadvantages
behind
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this
 statement. Mainly, some traditional arts were eradicated after the
indroduction
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introduction
 of foreign films.
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, foreign
movies
much
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 entertaining but
it
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they
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lacks
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 in conveying a good meaning to the movie. To illustrate, some ancient traditional festivals are ruined because of
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the indroduction
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indroduction
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introduction
 of foreign
fims
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firms
films
,
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the distruction
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distruction
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destruction
 of
cultural
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value
 of a particular place.
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, it
also
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with
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older
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the older
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 generation and
young
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 generation in terms of cultural aspects. As far as I am concerned , maintaining cultural values
as well as
 gaining innovative aspects through foreign
movies
.
it
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 should used in
balanced
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a balanced
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 way, where it can utilised for good. To recapitulate, there are
significant
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 number of ups and downs
about
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this
 trend. Some advantages are
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 more knowledge and
boost
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boosting
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 the level of skill. Several disadvantages are local festivals mitigated and diminished the
value
 of
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relationships
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 with generations.
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