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Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibilities to climate change than developing countries. others believe countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment . discuss both sides and give your opinion

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 many argue that only the first world
countries
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 should participate more actively in the global warming problem, I think that all the nations have an equal role to play in addressing the issue. On the one hand, developed nations have industrialised every possible sector in their
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 and reached a pinnacle in their growth. From
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 of new buildings to building more and more factories each year to polluting the surroundings with biohazardous wastes, they have contributed a lot to the climate change we are witnessing today. Many blame
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 indiscriminate use of natural resources have led to
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 stage.
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, the nuclear bomb that was used in World War 2 continues to show radiation effects
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 date. So, they owe it to the world
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 some of the damage they have caused.
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, climate change is a global issue. It affects everyone equally and
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, all
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countries
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 have an equal responsibility to tackle the issue.
The developing
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Developing
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countries
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 can use safer energy resources to power the nation.
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, the use of solar power panels
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 rising in most
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the
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countries
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 and is proven to be a natural and effective way to generate electricity. Hydroelectric dams and windmills work on a similar principle, using water and wind to generate power, respectively.
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 measures, if taken, can at least prevent
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 damage to the environment. In conclusion,
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 the industrialised
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 have contributed greatly towards global warming, I think it is everyone’s job to make
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 earth purer and greener than how we found it.
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