The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018
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The chart demonstrates data points about weekly
household
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expenditure in a specific country in 1968 and 2018. First of all, we can group the expenditure post into primary spending and leisure. Primary spending includes food, housing, fuel &
power
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and power
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, clothing and footwear,
household
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goods, personal goods, and transport.
Although
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the
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apply
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household
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goods spending stayed at 8%, housing and transportation expenses both rose by 9% and 6%
due to
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higher price inflation in properties and vehicles. The rest of the primary spending posts experienced
slight
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a slight
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decrease
by
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of
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2.5%-5% except for food spending. We can see a significant decrease of half the percentage
on
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of
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spending
for
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on
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food in 2018 compared to 50 years earlier.
In contrast
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, modern families prefer leisure as the expense soared by 13.5%. In summary, almost all the posts in the weekly
household
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primary spending declined in 2018 compared
1986
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to 1986
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and the losing percentage went to leisure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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