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Some people with good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What problems does this cause?

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These days,
People
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 who have satisfying education and experience are moving to other
countries
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 to work.In my point of view,Their
country
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 can not provide enough opportunities for them and it can cause a lot of issues.I will explain my opinion and problems that could happen in the upcoming paragraphs. There are majority of
people
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 are skilled in their careers or jobs and many of them are working abroad.There are some causes and one of them is that they are moving to developing
countries
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.Some
countries
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 can not afford to pay enough money for them and they are forced to move abroad because of financial issues.
People
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 can not provide enough money for their families even if they are skilled if they work in their
country
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 that does not pay much and they start to go to another developed
country
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.They might solve financial issues via foreign
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.
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,They may lose some personal
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 or experience with longing.One of the personal
things
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 is traditional
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.Because the environment differs
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countries
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 or continents and demand to change
people
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's lifestyles.
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,They used to do what
people
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 around them do.When they return to their home
country
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,they experience culture shock.That's why,it can cause
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 about culture.The second one is longing.
People
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 miss their family members or home
country
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 are they foreign and they might want to fly to their home.Because They can not adapt to that environment without close
people
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. In conclusion, Individuals work abroad for some reasons and it might have negative impacts on both longing and cultural habits.
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