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Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and school should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying accademic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

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Some persons are of the view that since
children
 do not appreciate the working world, the
school
curricular
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 should incorporate some working
time
 for adolescents alongside
pursuit
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the pursuit
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 of academics. I completely disagree with
this
. On the one hand, people in support of
this
 idea are of the opinion that
work
 life will eventually happen in the life of every individual who grows into adulthood, so, it will be beneficial to groom them young so it
becoms
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becomes
 a part of them to make their transition from
school
 life to the job market smooth. To illustrate
this
, a survey found that some adults who took up jobs when they were young and schooling
were
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 well
equiped
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equipped
 after their tertiary education for the corporate world.
On the other hand
, I will argue that
,
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school
children
 are already overwhelmed with the multiple subjects they have to study at
school
. Schooling is a full-
time
 activity where teachers expect the learners to sit in during teaching hours and when they are dismissed to go home, they are given assignments to complete, revise the day's subject that was studied and
also
 prepare for the following day's learning activities. All these are without the
time
 these
children
 will have to help with home chores and play with their friends as all
work
 and no play makes Jack a dull boy. It has been proven by research that students need some
time
 off
school
work
 to
rejuvenise
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rejuvenate
them
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with respect to their critical thinking skills. It is obvious from
this
 point that there's already a lot for pupils to accomplish and it will be detrimental to compound their situation.
In
addition
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 there is
time
 for everything, and I'd say
children
 should be allowed to enjoy their childhood moments.
As when
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 they transform
to
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 the adult world, they will
then
 learn
live
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according to
 that standard.
To sum up
, I strongly disagree with the thought of making
children
 do some
work
 in the name of
they
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 not understanding
worklife
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work
 as it isn't an appropriate thing to do. It will go a long way to burden them and lead to poor academic outcomes.
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