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Online shopping has gained immense popularity in recent years, challenging the traditional brick-and-mortar stores. Examine the advantages and disadvantages of both methods of shopping and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that online stores have a bigger impact than old stores.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that it is a good kind of impact, there is
also
 an argument that opposes
this
 idea.
This
 essay will analyse
this
 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, the diversity of the online
store
 helps to make it very popular and it has easy access and it is convenient. In other ,words I can order any product from my own home.
In addition
, with an online ,
store
 it is easy to have products from another country.
For example
, if I want to order something from another country I do not need to travel to it.
On the other hand
, individuals will be lazy and active which will affect their health. It is
also
 possible to say that because they will go out less it affects their lifestyle.
Moreover
, it will drive traditional stores to bankruptcy.
For instance
, if they all depended on online
shops
 the old
shops
 would not survive and would close forever. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
 question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that online
shops
 it is the future so traditional
shops
 need to adapt to it, I suggest that every old
store
 opens an online
store
 so they can keep up with the evaluation of
this
 sector.
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coherence cohesion task response
The essay should have a clear introduction and conclusion. There is a lack of structure in the essay, leading to poor coherence and cohesion. More specific examples and a balanced analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of both shopping methods are needed.
coherence cohesion task response
Improve the logical structure of the essay to ensure the points are presented in a clear and organized manner. Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are well-defined and that they address all aspects of the topic. Provide more specific examples to support your ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Brick-and-mortar
  • Tactile
  • Fraud
  • Geographical limitations
  • Price comparisons
  • Instant gratification
  • Personalized service
  • Social experience
  • Hybrid models
  • Click and collect
  • Impulse buying
  • Physical examination
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
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