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Band 7.5

You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •describe the health problem •explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office •suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

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Dear Jonathan, I am writing in
regards
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 to the health issue
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 caused by the office environment. For the past few days, I have been feeling a light fever and infection in my stomach. It all started when I first used the office mug from the
kitchen
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last
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 Monday. As soon as I reached home that day, I started feeling nauseous and vomited twice. The fact is I have seen flies and mosquitoes in the office
kitchen
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 many times,
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 the garbage bin is not emptied some days even if it smells bad.
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, the
kitchen
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 lacks the supplies like dishwashing soap , scrub and all. So, people leave the used utensil in the sink. The solution to
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 problem is adding supplies to the
kitchen
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 and making it mandatory for whoever uses the
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 to clean afterwards so that other people can use it. Adding to that, scheduling weekly garbage change policy must be followed by a cleaner and spraying some antibacterial medicine to disinfect the area. I hope you will take the proposed actions to maintain hygiene. Yours Faithfully, Manpreet Kaur

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task
The response adequately addresses the task and presents relevant ideas but could benefit from specifying the exact health problem and its severity.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate but could be improved with more formality and politeness.
logical structure
The letter maintains a clear and logical structure, and each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
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