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Some people think it's bettere to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe its good to have frinends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have differing opinions about the choice of
friends
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. One group proposes befriending persons with similar thoughts on matters is better whilst
others
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 suggest
friends
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 with varying opinions are
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 good.
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 essay seeks to look at both views. My opinion on the issue at hand it having
friends
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 from any of these categories is beneficial.
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 with,
people
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 are comfortable to engage
others
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 who are
like minded
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. I can understand
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 as most relationships thrive on understanding. To illustrate
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, a common ground for petty fights
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friends
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 arises from misunderstanding. Nobody enjoys being
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 a place of turmoil most of the time.
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 makes it apparent why some individuals propose a person dwells among
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 who think like them so as to allow various relationships to progress and allow peace
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.
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, I will say variety is truly the spice of life. Considering the fact that most individuals grew up in different backgrounds, it is not always the case to have
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 who think like you as
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.
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, despite personal differences in opinions about issues,
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 can welcome
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others
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 ideas to complement what they already know. Scientists have made a conclusion from several researches that it is possible for
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 with varied characteristics to thrive well in the same environment and make progress. I think our uniqueness can be complementary
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 we should explore companies with different ideas from ours.
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, it is true that
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 may decide to have allies who are
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 but my opinion is that we spread our tentacles to embrace
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 who do not think as we do.
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 undoubtedly has a lot of advantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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