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The two charts illustrate the number of books that were borrowed since June to September, from four different villages.

The two charts illustrate the number of books that were borrowed since June to September, from four different villages.
The two charts illustrate the number of
books
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 that were borrowed
since
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 June to September, from four different villages. Obviously, it is clear from the pie chart that
“Biography”
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the “Biography”
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 type of book is rated popular choice of readers, with
a
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nearly half of the pie chart. The rest of the circle graph
,
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 shows sections between 10 per
cents
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cent
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 to 20 per
cents
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cent
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 sections. The line graph provides
a
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the
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 number of
books
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 that were borrowed from four village libraries
,
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 and amount of lent
books
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. In four months , “Ryeslip” town started as an enormous leader with 300 selling products. Gradually falling experienced the “Ryeslip”, ended up in September with 250
books
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. “Sutton wood” with wild fluctuations started
with
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 250, fell down in
august
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 to
the
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100,
suddenly
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and suddenly
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 rocketed to 300. Sustainable two countrysides “West Eaton”, and “Church Mount” both began from 50 borrowed
books
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,
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 and eventually came to 150 with equal numbers.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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