The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.
The diagrams below give information on
transport
and
car
use in Edmonton.
Pie
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The pie
A pie
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chart shows
the
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apply
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which
transports
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transport
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people
used
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use
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.
Table
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The table
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shows reasons why they are used
transports
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as transports
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.
Car
is most used
transport
. It takes just under
the
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apply
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50 per
cent
,more precisely 45 per
sent
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cent
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.
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The next
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Next
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The next
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most used
transport
is
LRT
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the LRT
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. Light Rail Transit.
Percentage
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The percentage
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in
diagram
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the diagram
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is 35 per
cent
,10% less than
car
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a car
the car
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. Rest 20
percentage
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per cent
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is Bus and Taxi,Bus is 10 per
cent
,respectively Taxi is
also
10 per
cent
,
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apply
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because
Car
and LRT
takes
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take
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vast
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the vast
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majority of
pie
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the pie
a pie
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chart. Reasons why
car
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the car
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was used in Edmonton .
Firstly
,commute to work. 55 per
cent
people
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of people
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used
car
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a car
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To get to work. For
the
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apply
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shopping
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,shopping
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this
transport
was used too ,15 per
cent
out of
hundred
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a hundred
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. Leisure activities
is
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are
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too 15 %.
Rest
Verb problem
The other
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two causes
is
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are
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Business and taking children to school.
Business
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The business
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has more proportion,just under
the
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half ,45 per
cent
. Taking children to school is 40 per
cent
,5 % less than business.
Overall
,the pie chart shows that
Car
was
most
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the most
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used
transport
in Edmonton.
Table
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The table
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shows why it was used. 55 per
cent
people
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of people
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uses
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use
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car
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the car
a car
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to commute to work.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, car, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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