The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different month in 2014 from 4 village libraries.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different month in 2014 from 4 village libraries.
The line graph shows the number of
books
that were borrowed in four different
month
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months
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in 2014 from 4 village libraries. The pie chart shows the percentage of
books
by type,that were borrowed over
this
time.
First
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The first
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library
is West Eaton. Started with 50
books
in June and slightly gets to 150 in September.
Second
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The second
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library
is Ryeslip. It is the highest line in June,300
books
and fell down to 170 in September. Sutton Wood is
third
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the third
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library
. It started with 250
books
,in July grows
for
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to
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20
books
. In
august
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August
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it sharply dropped to 100
books
in
month
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a month
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. But in September increased
for
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by
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200
books
. More precisely 300
books
in
month
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a month
show examples
. Types of Book borrowed from each
library
has 5 pieces in
pie
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a pie
the pie
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chart. Most ordered
is
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are
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Fiction
books
with 43 per cent. Almost half. The second most popular type of
books
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book
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is Biography . Nearly 20 per cent. Science and History
books
is
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are
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equally ,14
percentage
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per cent
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. The least popular
books
is
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are
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Self Help
books
,With only 10 per cent out of
hundred
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a hundred
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.
Overall
,the most popular type of
books
is Fiction and the highest with borrowed
books
library
is Ryeslip and Sutton Wood with 300
books
in
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per
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month
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, month, library with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrowing patterns
  • trend analysis
  • comparison
  • seasonal influence
  • predictions
  • strategies for improvement
  • optimization
  • resource management
  • community engagement
  • library facilities
  • increase borrowing rates
  • monitoring
  • key findings
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