The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now

The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now
The above picture illustrates the park design back in 1980 and compares it to modern times. Newly implemented garden development can be observed by the addition of
playground
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, and barbecue setup for families who are interested in cooking,
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, all entry and exit gates were removed. The most significant change is the removal of walls and gates, making the rest area more appealing to guests from all over, who are looking for an open area that's represented in the new design. All
innovation
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innovations
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are for the greater good, not only does it make the park look more natural to the eye, but new
adjustment
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are appreciated by making it more
family oriented
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. People can gather with their family members, given that there are allocated places for kids to play,
as well as
cooking for adults.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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