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The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The display table gives information about the
population
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 in Australia
as well as
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 Malaysia in the years 1980 and 2002. In Australia in total
population
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millions in the year 1980,
it
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 was 14.7 and in the year
2002
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 it was 19.6. The male
population
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 in 1980 was 49.9% and in 2002 it was 49.9%. Female
population
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 in 1980 was 50.1% and in 2002 it was 50.1. The birth rate in 1980 was 1.5% and in 2002 it was 1.3%. The average annual
population
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 growth in 1980 was 1.2% and in 2002 it was 1.3%. The
population
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 aged over 65 in 1980 was 9.6% and in 2002 it was 12.4. In Malaysia, the total
population
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 in 1980 was 13.7% and in 2002 it was 24.3%. The male
population
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 in 1980 was 50.3% and in 2002 it was 50.6%. Female
population
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 in 1980 was 49.7% and in 2002 it was 49.4%. The birth rate in 1980 was 3.2% and in 2002 it was 2.2%. The average annual
population
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 in 1980 was 2.4% and in 2002 it was 2.1. The
population
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 aged over 65 in 1980 was 3.7% and in 2002 it was 4.3%.
To conclude
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, the above information is in %. The data is on Australia and Malaysia.
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