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The graph illustrates the rates of recycling in the households of three different countries: The UK, France and Germany from 2005-2015.

The graph illustrates the rates of recycling in the households of three different countries: The UK, France and Germany from 2005-2015.
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The line graph depicts the proportion of recycling the
households
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 in the
UK
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,
France
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 and Germany between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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 it is noticeable that
France
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of regional
households
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 before 2009 when the
UK
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 replaced it.
Moreover
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, the
UK
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 had the largest proportion of regional
households
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,
while
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 the
France
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 obtained lowest.
However
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, the
percentage
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 of the
UK
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 and Germany increased over the period in question,
while
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France
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 decreased except final
years
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.
To begin
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 with the
UK
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, it increased steadily from 35 % in 2005 to 40 % in 2009 before going up to 55 % in 2011.
However
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, it rose marginally to over 60 % in the final
years
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 and had the highest
percentage
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 of recycling rates. The figure for Germany went up progressively from 20 % to under 60% in the final
years
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. With regards to
France
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, it dropped gradually from 50 % to 30 % in 2013 before increasing to 40 % in the final
years
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.
However
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, it had the lowest
percentage
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 of regional
households
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 over the period in question.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, uk, france, percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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