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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 report derives from the diagrams, which illustrate the differences in West
Park
 Secondary School’s construction between 1950 and 2010 over 30
years
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30-year
 period. A good starting point would be to say that, the biggest change was building
car
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a car
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park
 over the years
shown
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apply
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, whilst
school
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the school
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 was in the same
area
. The first result worth pointing out is that
,
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 the
area
 of farmland has been changed every period shown; in 1950, it had an
area
, but in 1980, sports
field
 replaced its placement.
However
, in 2010,
area
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the area
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 of
sports
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the sports
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field
 decreased, and it shared
this
field
 with
car
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a car
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park
. Another piece of information that can be observed is that
,
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main
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the main
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 building of
school
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the school
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 had not
change
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changed
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.
Moreover
,
playground
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the playground
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 had the same
field
 in 1950 and 1980, but it had to share its placement with
sports
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the sports
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field
 in 2010.
On the other hand
, the houses were removed
by
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to gain
area
 for
car
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the car
a car
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park
 and science block in 1980. Science block had the same
field
while
car
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the car
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park
 increased its
area
 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, car, area, field with synonyms.
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