The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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This

report derives from the diagrams, which illustrate the differences in West

Park

Secondary School’s construction between 1950 and 2010 over 30

years

Correct your spelling

30-year

period. A good starting point would be to say that, the biggest change was building

car

Correct article usage

a car

show examples

park

over the years

shown

Verb problem

apply

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, whilst

school

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the school

show examples

was in the same

area

. The first result worth pointing out is that

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apply

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the

area

of farmland has been changed every period shown; in 1950, it had an

area

, but in 1980, sports

field

replaced its placement.

However

, in 2010,

area

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the area

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sports

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the sports

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field

decreased, and it shared

this

field

with

car

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a car

show examples

park

. Another piece of information that can be observed is that

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apply

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main

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the main

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building of

school

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the school

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had not

change

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changed

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Moreover

playground

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the playground

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had the same

field

in 1950 and 1980, but it had to share its placement with

sports

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the sports

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field

in 2010.

On the other hand

, the houses were removed

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apply

show examples

to gain

area

for

car

Add an article

the car

a car

show examples

park

and science block in 1980. Science block had the same

field

while

car

Correct article usage

the car

show examples

park

increased its

area

in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, car, area, field with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.

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4Word repetition
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17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

172 words

6.50

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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