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In many place , new homes are needed, but the only space available for building themis in the country side . some people believe it is more important to protect the country side and not build new home there. what is your opinion about this?

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The issue of building new homes in the
countrysideside
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countryside
 is the only leftover
the
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place
 for more houses. But prevention of
countrysideside
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countryside
 land is
also
 important . In my opinion to leave the
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countryside
 areas.
To begin
 with , It is essential to have a house to live
and
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also
 consider the backdrop
place
 in
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the country
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country
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countryside
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side
 . It is
prominent
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to
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upcoming
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 generation to have thought about agriculture .
Subsequently
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 if we occupy all the space there will be no nature involved in the
day to day
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 life, which causes
the
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 dreadful line in human life.
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, if we have
a
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 apartment for nature. it gives us more
energyticlifestyle
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energetic lifestyle
also
 the agriculture goodness to enhance our
country
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country's
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 economic level. In a similar manner building the house will take a spacious for living creature causes more for us . It will create a
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 for both
a
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aside
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side
.
On the other hand
 ,if
coubtry
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country
side
 area is divided into
evening
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the evening
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 ,morning walking
place
 and for youths to
havefun
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have fun
 in playing games. It will exhort them in
relaxing
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a relaxing
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place
 to follow up the positive relationship.
The fabulous
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 life ethics will not disturb our environment as a content of our things . Stupendous things
makesus
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make us
 enhance the wide range of activity to grow the tree to
pleasing
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 climate. In conclusion, I
frimly
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firmly
 believe that preventing the
country
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side
 should take
procedence
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precedence
 over constructing the buildings . It is our responsibility to protect the environment . It gives the assurance for upcoming generations to enjoy and benefits.
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