The table compares the salaries of teachers in secondary and high schools in five countries in 2009.
The table depicts the wages of teachers in initial and high schools in
Australia
, Denmark, Luxembourg
, Japan
and Korea
in 2009.
Overall
it is noticeable that Japan
had more years
to reach the maximum salary
, while
a Denmark lowest. Furthermore
, Luxembourg
had the maximum salary
, while
Australia
smallest. However
, all countries received a high salary
after 15 years
and maximum ,except
when they started work.
To begin
with, Luxembourg
had the largest wage when they started , namely 80,000 which
in three times bigger than Japan
and Korea
, 34,000 and 30,000. Denmark had approximately
45,000, while
Australia
only 28,000. However
, after 15 years
Australia
and Korea
had a similar
results, namely 48,000. Japan
had roughly 65,000 which is 2 times smaller than Luxembourg
.
With regards to the maximum, Luxembourg
accounted for 132,000 which is two times bigger than
a Korea
, roughly 62,000. However
, Luxembourg
was the country with the highest salary
over the period in question. Moreover
, Japan
accounted for 86,000 , while
Australia
maintained the same numbers in the final years
. However
, Australia
had the lowest salary
over the period in questionSubmitted by dimash171206 on
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