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In the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad because on holiday agree or disagree

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Our world is full of amazing places and almost every
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people
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 would to visit
such
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 ones. On holidays the
people
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 like to have an opportunity to
travel
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other
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to other
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countries
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. But some of them like to
travel
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 only in their own country to see local sceneries. In my opinion, in
future
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the
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people
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 will definitely
travel
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 to other
countries
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 to spend their holidays. The relevant factors will be discussed in the
eassay
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essay
 below.
To begin
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with
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 most
people
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 will prefer to spend their holidays traveling.
Due to
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 the busy
life style
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lifestyle
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,
people
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 get more tired in their
day to day
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 life. So when they get
chance
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 most of them like to visit other
countries
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 to try and see something new.
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Furthermore
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the
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traveling
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travelling
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 improves their language skills,
broaden
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broadens
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the
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their
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 horizons,
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and give
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give
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gives
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an
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them an
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 opportunity to communicate with foreigners.
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Moreover
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people
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 learn about the
deferent
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different
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 cultures and taste versions kind of foods.
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Additionally
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 they can get brilliant experiences which
is
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 never forget.
On the other
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hand
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people
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 like to have an experience about different weather.
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Furthermore
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Hence
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, they can buy tickets cheaper in the promotion period they will like to
travel
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.
For instance
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The
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European
people
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 like to
travel
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 to Asian
countries
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 when they have winter and
the
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at the
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 same time some
people
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 like to visit
to
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apply
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Europe to see
snow
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the snow
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. In conclusion
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hence
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apply
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people
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having
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have
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 ample money to spend, they will enjoy their life. I'm totally
disagreed
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disagree
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 with
this
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 statement because
of
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apply
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people
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 always like to
traveling
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travel
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in
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on
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 their holiday to see new things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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