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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? What measures can you suggest to make it easier?

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The following essay claims that it is quite difficult for people to get accustomed to new situations and changes in their lives. It may be possible because in
this
 case, they may be out of their comfort zone and
this
 leads to anxiety. There are lots of ways to overcome that
adaptation
period
,
such
 as starting to change their lives gradually, or still being busy with their previous hobbies as before during their free time. First and foremost, as I mentioned before adapting to new situations means being out of the comfort zone, which means that people may feel anxiety, feel stressed or maybe even depressed. It is a regular response for living beings to new situations, and after some
period
 of
time
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 they usually get used to
new
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 lifestyle. As I mentioned before one of the best ways to change the lifestyle gradually in
this
 case, it will be much easier to adapt to a new lifestyle.
Also
, if a person moves somewhere else, it may be better for them still continue to be busy with their hobbies and making new acquaintances and friends. There is a probability that they will not focus on the changes
,
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 if they will be busy all the time.
Lastly
, I would like to mention that the majority of institutions (mostly universities) provide help for
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international students. As an example, they may provide orientation programs and immigration advice for international students. And
this
 may make the
adaptation
period
 a little bit easier.
To sum up
, in my
opinion
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 the reason
of
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 difficulties during
adaptation
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period
 is being out of your comfort zone.
And the
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 best way to avoid difficulties during
adaptation
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period
 is probably,
starting
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 changes gradually and
being
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 busy with
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hobbies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fear of the unknown
  • Comfort zone
  • Familiar
  • Inherently uncertain
  • Challenges
  • Necessary tools
  • Skills
  • Efficiently
  • Emotional ties
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Overwhelming
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Social backgrounds
  • Adaptable
  • Change management
  • Coping strategies
  • Resilience
  • Support network
  • Preparation
  • Flexibility
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