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Advertising has become important tool for business and society. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Advertising is considered a crucial tool for business and society. There are pros and cons of
this
 progression. The
ads
industries
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industry is
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 are growing trend. They can access millions of people through many social media platforms
such
 as Instagram, TikTok, and
Youtube
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. It has a considerable impact on the community. If
ads
 become popular, it can lead to social interest and raise sales. Some
ads
 are personalized to our interests so we can come across the right product more easily than in the past.
However
, there are some drawbacks to seeing
ads
 too much.
Firstly
, some people have misbeliefs about beauty standards because of portraits, which are adjusted by Photoshop application. Next,since
ads
 have a psychological impact on our needs, we might end up buying more than we really need.
For example
, seeing the main actress of
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 drama series using brand name lipstick can increase our need to possess that product. In conclusion, there are pros and cons
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 using advertisements. It can have both positive and negative impacts on the economy
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 and community. There should be some limits on
ads
 and people should consciously watch them.
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