The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.
The figures illustrate the approximate number of jeans sold
in
Change preposition
by
two
companies and their estimated market share in the coming year.
Correct article usage
the two
Overall
, it is clear that
people will buy more in December and the two firms will share half of the market with other competitors.
Starting from January, the sales of jeans in Jack & Jones will be four times higher than Mango
. Change preposition
in Mango
This
trend will continue until July and August where
Correct word choice
when
Mango
will sell more products than its competitor.
In December, residents tend to buy more clothings
from Jack & Jones than its opponent, nearly one-third more. Change the wording
clothing
items of clothing
articles of clothing
Moreover
, the pairs of jeans sold in Decmeber
are six-fold in Correct your spelling
December
Mango
and two-fold in Jack when compared to January. The predicted market share of Jack & Jones will be 10% higher than Mango
in next
winter season since Jack sells more goods Correct article usage
the next
overall
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