These day it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays
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to different countries
isnt
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isn't
a different process. It is not needed a large
prepaparation
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preparation
as it was in the past. There are some advantages and disadvantages of it. In
this
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I'll consider both of them On the one hand, as
traveling
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to
another countries
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isn't a difficult process any more there are some disadvantages
of
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it. Anyone can travel to
whereever
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wherever
where ever
they want to, it's not always good.
For example
, a person who
comited
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committed
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can easily to another continent without any
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consequences
. As an example,
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individual named Jack Wilson killed his wife and moved from Canada to France in 2012, and still nobody knows where he is hiding.
On the other hand
, there are way more advantages of easily travelling. As tourism isn't that hard
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people
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need to prepare their documents months before the trip.
For instance
in the
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Soviet
Union, if you wanted to visit another country you had to
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an exam
to
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the airport commission and prepare all documents you have ever had in your life. It's great that people
doesnt
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don't
have to do all
assighment
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assignment
assignments
to travel to another country. In conclusion, in my
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opinion,
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the advantages of easing the
traleing
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trading
training
trailing
process are really
overweigh
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the disadvantages
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it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost local economies
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • environmental degradation
  • deforestation
  • overcrowding
  • commodification
  • authentic cultural experiences
  • revenue
  • perspective
  • globalization
  • sustainable tourism
  • heritage sites
  • local customs
  • appreciation of diversity
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