The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

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The bar graph illustrates the forecasts about the sale number of jeans from two manufacturers for the next

year

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in Turkey, and the pie chart demonstrates their

market

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share as predictions during the given period.

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, the bar graph indicates that

at the end

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of the next

year

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although

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mango and Jack and Jones estimated sales will face rises in number, the latter company is going to have a higher

market

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share than the former. Focusing on the bar graph, it is predicted for the upcoming

year

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, Mango sales will increase sharply from over 100 in January to more than 500 thousand pairs by August.

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, remains approximately the same for 3 months, before a slight climb to 600,000 units of pairs.

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its competitor, Jack and Jones, witness a significant decrease after the first month of the next

year

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, from nearly half of a million to under 250 thousand pairs, it will surge dramatically for the subsequent period, reaching 250 thousand more than it rival in the same month with 850,000 sales. Regarding the estimated shares in the pie chart, Jack and Jones's company is predicted to hold a third of the

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Mango will only gain a profit of a fifth in Turkish retail.

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, for the next

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while

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these 2 giant companies of Turkey have 50 per cent of the

market

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, other companies have the other half in the cloth industry of

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country.

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estimated sales
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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more of these natural resources. To what extent do you agree?

People from many countries are marrying later and having fewer children. Give reasons why this is happening. Are there any positive or negative developments regarding this?