The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line chart shows information on the residents living in the cities in
many
four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020.MoreovThe data projection of populations for 2030 and 2040. Correct word choice
apply
Overall
, the line chart experienced upward throughout of period.
To begin
with, the percentage of Malaysian residents began at 30% in 1970. The trend gradually increased throughout of
the year Change preposition
apply
that
Correct determiner usage
the
population
predict
at 80% in 2040. Wrong verb form
is predicted
Moreover
, the population
trend seems like
in Indonesia began Change preposition
apply
more
or less 10% in 1970 Change preposition
at more
Correct word choice
and than
than
gradually rose Correct your spelling
then
approximately
50% in 2020. The predictions of people who will be living in the cities reach out Change preposition
to approximately
two
Change preposition
to two
others
countries at 60% in 2040.
Correct quantifier usage
other
Furthermore
, at began the total population
who was living in city
of Add an article
the city
Philippines
Correct article usage
the Philippines
similarly
same
in Malaysia at around 30%. The Correct word choice
similar
population
was
rocketed Unnecessary verb
apply
at
50% in 1990 Change preposition
to
than
dropped Replace the word
then
at
around 45% in 2010. The Change preposition
to
population
will predicted
Change the verb form
be predicted
rising
Change the verb form
to rise
at
50% in 2040. Change preposition
by
Nevertheless
, the population
who was living in Thailand grew throughout the period. It started below 20% in 1970. Between 1990 and 2020 the trend experienced stable. Thus
, in 2040 the number of populations will increase at around 40%.Submitted by haloalwan on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
▼