The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.

The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.
The line graph illustrates how many Vietnamese
students
learned in 4
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countries , namely France ,Germany ,The US ,
Canada
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and Canada
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over the period from 2000 to 2015. It can be clearly seen that the
amount
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of Vietnamese
students
in the US achieved the highest learning rate .
In addition
, student numbers in four countries increased in 2015. The
amount
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of Vietnamese
students
in the US between 2000 to 2010 rose significantly
about
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3
million
. Meanwhile ,
he
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the
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number of
students
studying abroad in France remained the same from 2005 to 2010. In Germany, the number of
students
studying here decreased sharply from 2000 to 2010 , from about 3
million
students
to less than 2
million
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.
Besides
in Canada, the
amount
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of
students
studying
in
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here increased gradually between 2000 to 2015.The line of
students
in The US in 2015 rocketed steeply
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5
million
and hit
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highest of
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students
studying
in
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here.The
amount
of
students
in Canada
although
increased but still at the bottom of the graph.
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