Sport activity is a vital for human's health. Do you agree or not?

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Sport

Fix the agreement mistake

Sports

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activity must be introduced gradually. Simple walks

starting

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start

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from 3 km and

increasing

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increase

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the distance to the distance

that is

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comfortable for you. What about getting back to

the

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apply

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gardening? It is not only a great type of exercise but health benefits as you will grow healthy food for yourself and

family

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your family

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. Alternatively, If you could go to the pool, swimming is a nice physical activity for improving the strength of your body and weight loss. If you would prefer intense exercise, you can try a workout with dumbbells (starting with a small weight). In sports, the main thing is to find a type(s) of

exercising

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exercise

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which will be suitable for you. Physical activity should not be done against one's

wish

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wishes

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. To fall in love with sports (especially if you wish that) you need to try different directions and

as a

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result

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you will choose something.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

147 words

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Sport activity is a vital for human's health. Do you agree or not?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Task 2: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some places lod age is valued,while in other cultures youth is considered more important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pulpils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a school uniform?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?