Sport activity is a vital for human's health. Do you agree or not?

Sport
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Sports
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activity must be introduced gradually. Simple walks
starting
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from 3 km and
increasing
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increase
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the distance to the distance
that is
comfortable for you. What about getting back to
the
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gardening? It is not only a great type of exercise but health benefits as you will grow healthy food for yourself and
family
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. Alternatively, If you could go to the pool, swimming is a nice physical activity for improving the strength of your body and weight loss. If you would prefer intense exercise, you can try a workout with dumbbells (starting with a small weight). In sports, the main thing is to find a type(s) of
exercising
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which will be suitable for you. Physical activity should not be done against one's
wish
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. To fall in love with sports (especially if you wish that) you need to try different directions and
as a
result
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you will choose something.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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