The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.
The bar chart displays the prediction of sales of
jeans
for two companies next
year
and the pie chart illustrates these businesses'
market
share in
jeans
at the end
of next
year
in Turkey.
Overall
, it has been predicted that the number of sold
jeans
for both companies is going to increase,
while
the
market
share of Jack&
Jones
will be higher than Mango
at the end
of next
year
.
To begin
, the quantity of pants for Mango that will be sold in January is 100,000. It has been estimated that the sales of
jeans
will jump by six times
of
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its initial number
at the end
of the period.
Similarly
, the predicted sales for
jeans
in Jack&
Jones
will be 450 at the beginning of the next
year
.
Although
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its estimated quantity will be dropped by half of its initial value in the second month, its predicted wholesale of
jeans
will increase to 900,000
jeans
next December. As for the pie chart, it is expected that the
market
part of Jack&
Jones
will be 30% and the relative ratio of Mango will be two-thirds of Jack&
Jones
,
while
the
market
stake for other brands will be half of all.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jeans, year, market, jack&, jones with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated sales
  • projected market share
  • dominant player
  • competition
  • consumer choice
  • pricing strategies
  • market trends
  • marketing campaigns
  • economic conditions
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