The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.

The graph bellow shows the number of visitors to three museums between 2000 and 2010.
The bar chart demonstrates the
number
of people who visited three museums in millions, namely MET,
Edo
and the National
Museum
over a period of 6 years from 2000 to 2010. The numbers of visitors who went to MET in New York and
Edo
in Tokyo from 2000 to 2005 have the same trend.
Firstly
, the years from 2000 to 2001 saw a considerable decline in the
number
of people visiting MET in New York from 12
million
to 6
million
, which was followed by a levelling off until one year,
then
rising to 14
million
in 2005.
Secondly
, A gradual decrease can be found in the
number
of individuals who visit
Edo
in Tokyo from 13
million
in 2000 to 6.1
million
in 2003, after which the trend showed a moderate increase to 10
million
in 2001. 
However
, the
number
of people visiting the National
Museum
in China shows a different trend. There is a dramatic increase in the
number
of individuals who visit the National
Museum
from 6
million
in 2000 to 16
million
in 2003. In total, the quantity of individuals going to
Edo
in Tokyo was at the first place,
then
dropping at the
last
place
at the end
.
On the other hand
, the
number
of the National
Museum
was the lowest,
then
rising at the first place in the final stage
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