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Some people think the media – television and films – negatively affect people’s behaviour. Others do not think so. How do you think the media affects people’s behavior? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It goes without saying, that television and films influence our behaviour. Many people even say that it actually leads to
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negative thoughts, conclusions and actions. To make a long story short,
such
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disputive
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disputed
dispute
. On the one hand we may be affected by some advertisement, vivid scene in a movie or some bad news. We start to see things from another point of view and it may catch our attention and thoughts for
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 few hours, rarely days. We even may recall
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 fact in
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 middle of doing something, not related. Sometimes we need to discuss our feelings and
conserns
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concerns
 with a friend or relative to hear their opinion. Alternatively,
such
experience
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 may change someone's mood for a short period of time and I believe it cannot
make
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really
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 negative impact on
person's
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a person's
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 life or character. If an individual owns
chritical
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critical
 thinking and
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,
media
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the media
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 cannot make things upside down. As an example, I want to provide the day when I watched some cruel
scene
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 in the film. It
definetily
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definitely
 touched my feelings,
moreover
 I felt bad and insecure, but it only means
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 creators did a good job
to catch
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 me. As time flies, I
forgot
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 what I saw yesterday or
last
 week and come back to my usual lifestyle.
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, in my
opinion
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 everything around us may influence our future decisions and actions not only television, so even a small talk or event changes something inside us. But we cannot say for sure
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whether
wheather
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whether
 it was
negative
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a negative
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 or positive experience
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