Many people believe that playing games and watching TV programs is beneficial but others say it doesn't improve the mental ability of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree. if you are playing games (every day) and not doing your assignments, I am 85% sure that you will fail because assignments are VERY important especially when it's due tomorrow or later. but if you are using your phone for
studies
, I agree. because using your phone can help you with your
studies
or assignments, by searching in
google
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Google
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, and when it gives you the answer
then
it will surely help you more or get better. especially when you do not get what your teacher is saying.
and
Correct word choice
apply
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not all
apps
are disturbing us from our
studies
like those game
apps
you get addicted to like, (Roblox, call of Duty and more). but there are
apps
that
also
help you with your
studies
like GOGOMATH to help you with maths, SHAPES to help you know your shapes like circles, triangles etc. and dollhouse games like MYTOWN, TOCA BOCA. These can help your children know how to cook, decorate, build and more. There are more
apps
that are very useful like a ton. and
that is
what I think.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • critical thinking
  • strategy games
  • educational content
  • reinforce learning
  • excessive screen time
  • mental health
  • attention deficit disorders
  • social isolation
  • foster healthy development
  • interactivity
  • retention of information
  • active participation
  • virtual context
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