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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The shown maps describe a planned development in the future of an industrial
area
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 in the town of Norbiton.
Overall
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, the industrial after
renovating
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 will be added more features and all the factories will be demolished to make
place
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a place
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 for housing. As we can see in the first map, there are only 2 ways to get to the
center
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centre
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 of the industrial
area
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 which after
renovating
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renovation
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 will get add 2 more ways, so in total of 4. The present
area
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 has factories along
sides
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the sides
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 to the path
led
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leading
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 to the
center
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centre
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, the factories later will be demolished to make
ways
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way
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 for housing and services.
According to
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 the second map, the farmland will be moved to the East from where it is now and the farmland will still at the North of the river. More services will be added
such
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 as
:
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apply
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 shops, medical
centre
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centres
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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,
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and school
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school
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schools
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 which were surrounded by houses.
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, the renovated
area
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 will be
fill
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filled
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 up fully not
seperate
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separate
 like it is right now.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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