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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts information about the changes in the amount and variety of fast food consumed by Australian adolescents in 6 periods between 1975 and 2000 and measured by how much time they ate per
year
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. At first glance, fish and chips had the highest point at the beginning and decreased to the lowest levels,
however
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, pizza and hamburgers had the opposite situation and rapidly increased. In 1975 fish and chips were the most popular fast food and teenagers were consuming it over 100
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 a
year
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 until 1985.
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 figure started rapidly decreasing and reached the lowest peak at 40
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 a
year
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, It is
also
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 noticeable that only that line had a decreasing tendency.
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, the consumption of pizza had the highest increase from 1975 and attain 80
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 in 1984,
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 from that it was gradually raised to 100
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 in 1995 and stayed at the same level until the end of the sixth period. Hamburgers have been increasing gradually until 1985, after having a significant increase since that
year
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, it peaked 85
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 a
year
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • trends
  • consumption
  • type of fast food
  • popularity
  • peaked
  • hit a low
  • timeline
  • notable
  • switch
  • cultural trends
  • economic factors
  • marketing efforts
  • increase
  • decrease
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