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The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.

The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.
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The line graph provides information about the average number of Vietnamese
students
 studying in France,
Germany
, the US and Canada from to 2000
and
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2015.
Overall
, the number of French, American and Canadian
students
 studying has increased by 15 years.
In addition
, studying abroad in
Germany
 tended to decrease from 2000 to 2010.
Then
, studying abroad in
Germany
 from 2010 to 2015 tended to increase rapidly. In the US, scores are highest compared to all other
countries
.
However
,
Germany
 still reached its lowest level since 2010 and has been on a slow upward trend since 2015.
Similarly
, the number of
students
 studying abroad in Canada
also
 increased from about 1.5% of the total million
students
 currently studying.
On the contrary
, Vietnamese
students
 studying abroad in 2000 decreased in 2015. Studying abroad in France decreased from 2010 and increased from 2015. All four
countries
 have international
students
 participating, but
the
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most are American
students
. The United States is the most developed of the three
countries
,
while
 Canada has the least developed level among all the
remain
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countries
.
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