The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.

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The line graph provides information about the average number of Vietnamese

students

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studying in France,

Germany

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, the US and Canada from to 2000

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2015.

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, the number of French, American and Canadian

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studying has increased by 15 years.

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, studying abroad in

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tended to decrease from 2000 to 2010.

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, studying abroad in

Germany

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from 2010 to 2015 tended to increase rapidly. In the US, scores are highest compared to all other

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Germany

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still reached its lowest level since 2010 and has been on a slow upward trend since 2015.

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, the number of

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studying abroad in Canada

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increased from about 1.5% of the total million

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currently studying.

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, Vietnamese

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studying abroad in 2000 decreased in 2015. Studying abroad in France decreased from 2010 and increased from 2015. All four

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have international

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participating, but

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most are American

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. The United States is the most developed of the three

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Canada has the least developed level among all the

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Germany, the US and Canada between 2000 and 2015.

Parents are putting a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development? (24/02/2024)

Some people think that the government should invest money in arts and cultural events, while others believe that the government should spend money on more important things. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Topic: Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation» To what extent do you agree or disagree?