The pie charts display how electricity production by various energy sources has changed in Scotland in 20 years.

The pie charts display how electricity production by various energy sources has changed in Scotland in 20 years.
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the proportion of generated electricity by energy
source
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for
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20 years ago and
last
year in Scotland. Looking from an
overall
perspective, coal
the
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most significant type of resource
that is
used to generate energy by far in both years . Coal
also
slightly decreased its dominance. The three biggest energy sources for 20 years ago were coal, gas,
nuclear
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with 41.4%, 22.3% and 19.6%, respectively.
However
, coal slightly decreased from almost half to 32.7%. Despite a minor decrease of 0.6% to 21.7%
in
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last
year,
nuclear replaced
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gas as the second-highest source
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last
year. The remaining four resources were
hydro
natural flow,
hydro pumped
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storage, oil and other renewables.
Hydro
natural flow and
hydro
pumped storage merely dropped from 8.7
percent
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to 7.9 and from
three point
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one
percent
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to 2.2%, whilst
other
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two grew up from 2.1 to 4.0
percent
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and 2.8% to 5.1
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hydro, percent with synonyms.
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