The pie charts display how electricity production by various energy sources has changed in Scotland in 20 years.

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the proportion of generated electricity by energy

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20 years ago and

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year in Scotland. Looking from an

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perspective, coal

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most significant type of resource

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used to generate energy by far in both years . Coal

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slightly decreased its dominance. The three biggest energy sources for 20 years ago were coal, gas,

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with 41.4%, 22.3% and 19.6%, respectively.

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, coal slightly decreased from almost half to 32.7%. Despite a minor decrease of 0.6% to 21.7%

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gas as the second-highest source

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year. The remaining four resources were

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natural flow,

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storage, oil and other renewables.

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pumped storage merely dropped from 8.7

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to 7.9 and from

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to 2.2%, whilst

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two grew up from 2.1 to 4.0

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and 2.8% to 5.1

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

153 words

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The pie charts display how electricity production by various energy sources has changed in Scotland in 20 years.

Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support.

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?